I don’t know if you / i can call this haiku.
Is a woman false when you meet her.
If she has under gone plastic surgery, to be vein.
Or can she still be true to her man.
Haiku: False
7 Comments to “Haiku: False”
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Hi Harry,
the rules of haiku are pretty vague. I am never sure myself. I suppose the one characteristic is that there be at least one “fragment” to give it a cut or separation.
One other interpretation might look like:
false greeting smile
plastic surgery to be vain
does he see truthHowever this isn’t better or worse, just different. — Bill
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It does read better, i must put more thought into them:)
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actually less thought and less words. The pieces that make a poem grammatically correct when dropped make the haiku fragments more startling.
That’s pretty much all I know about it.Bill
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good one !! maybe could call it an extended haiku.
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Start a new trend in poetry 🙂
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Harry, check out this blog: http://fiercebuddhist.org/ He posts haiku almost daily… they’re pretty good! I think the basic rule is the lines have a set number of syllables. I think it’s 5-7-5. But then most people don’t really follow that rule anymore… 🙂
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Thanks Tiffany i’ll have a look.
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