how bold the explorers…almost a haiku…. a noku
Like a map
One finger traces
Discovers routes
And unknown treasure
map – poem
6 Comments to “map – poem”
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this is sweet irony… loved it!
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Thanks Deborah – it’s always hard to try to write a romantic poem without falling into cliche. I am glad you liked it.
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I really like this! Haiku or hoku!
The more I look into haiku and read about it from way back to how it has been allowed to change over the years, it seems anything goes! Anyway this is lovely 😊
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yes, the form is so powerful. That it changes means it’s alive, but I only label my 5,7,5ers haiku, but I am old school and language belongs to the young to shape and form.
Glad you liked it. I was torn using treasure as it might seem cliche, and the goal is to use ones own words and make it so popular it becomes the new cliche
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Yes, cliches can be a problem , but someties a word fits and treaure fits here!
Your poem reminded me of when I was a child. My father was in the Merchant Navy and at sea a great deal of the time beore I was born. He travelled all over the world. But he got a shore job after I was born. On a wekend my sisters and I used to getinto our parents’ bed on a morning. They had a bedspread with lines all over it and our father used to travel these lines with his finger and take us with him on is travels. Cosy times. 😊
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thanks — I am glad you shared that. What a great memory to have.
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